For my revisions the big part of it was adding a stronger introduction and a stronger conclusion. I did not really have an introduction on my first draft, and although I did have a conclusion, it was not very good. So I added what was my conclusion to the paragraph before it and wrote a better paragraph that concluded the essay better. For the introduction I laid out my opinion on the two different ways of learning and I also introduced the two articles that would be the “They Say” portion of my essay.

I had many surface errors where I switched words out and got rid of spelling errors. I changed “and”s to “a”s and got rid of a lot of “the”s that didn’t fit into sentences. I also tried to shorten some sentences or get rid of some that were repetitive because when I added the introduction and conclusion it made my word count go up and I was close to having too many words.